Updates 'n stuff!

[avocado_love]

Okay, so it's taken me longer than I thought it would, but I think I finally got my computer (and all the really important programs) up and running. Meanwhile I'm behind on my LJ comments, betaing and writing -- apologies everyone.

Speaking of writing, I'm working on a bit with Another Brother and (once again) coming across a problem.

Zuko stood behind them, and was about to add his own piece when a strong pair of arms grabbed him from behind. Before he could yell out, “Sokka! Help!” a hand slapped against his mouth and he was pulled behind the pillar.

 

Zuko struck out wildly, turning and catching his attacker across the shoulder. The man — Prince Iroh — grunted with the impact, but took it in favor of shoving him hard against the pillar. Zuko’s head snapped against hard stone; he was dazed, stunned for a precious few moments.

Iroh’s face was grim; and it had nothing to do with the Fire Temple literally falling to pieces around him.

Is it me, or did these paragraphs come out... attempted rape-y?

Maybe I just need some more sleep. *Passes out the brain bleach*

Comments

[dark-puck.livejournal.com]

Hrm... I don't think so. I rather like it, actually. Gives me butterflies in my stomach. Good action sequences do that. :D

[avocado-love.livejournal.com]

Aw really? Thanks! I think I just shouldn't write at night. I get these bizarre ideas.

[arielen.livejournal.com]

I love it too!

For me it is a simple and logical build fighting scene, although in the first Moment you might think in the direction. But I believe, you can show, that there will another outcome in the continuation of this scene. We all know what iroh really wants from earlier meetings.

And I think, that he won't let go him so easily this time. I am really looking forward to this part, I love these kind of confrontations, where the hero is tested in loyality to the people he loves and his bithright.

And so I am looking forward to this part again. Whow what an appetizer!

[avocado-love.livejournal.com]

haha! I'll admit... the scenes with Iroh and Zuko are the most fun for me to write. I can never out do the tension of the Ava-writers, but it's so much fun to play in their world. :D

[ashacrone.livejournal.com]

It flowed well, and it didn't seem like there was anything even remotely sexual about the connotations there. Just grab and bash. As soon as you see that it is Iroh there, the concept of 'rape' goes out the window. The man's awesome, and you know he cares about his family, therefore rape doesn't even enter into my thoughts as I read it. ^_^

[avocado-love.livejournal.com]

Now that it's morning, and I've had my coffee... I agree, it's not sexual at all. I just really gotta learn not to post my random thoughts at night. hehe. Thank you for your thoughts!

[thistle-chaser.livejournal.com]

Is it me, or did these paragraphs come out... attempted rape-y?

*laughs lots and lots* I didn't see it at all until you mentioned it, then I couldn't unsee it. I think it's fine, so long as you don't point that out in the notes or something. :D

[avocado-love.livejournal.com]

Haha! It's so wrong... and yet so right. (Just wait until Iroh shoves something hard and leathery into Zuko's hands a few paragraphs down)

*hands out more brain bleach*

[cxrdevil.livejournal.com]

All I see is one of my favorite shots from s1 recreated in Another Brother. BD! Love how you write action and tension, though, the emotion in this story is what keeps this reader coming back for more.

(I think the people who are going to read for creepy Irko rape subtext are going to see that no matter what you do, lol.)

[hekateselene.livejournal.com]

No.. not to me but I see where you're coming from. Maybe if you changed up the words a little you know change the wording then maybe it would flow a little more your style. Hoped I helped.